The girl appears only when the rain is heavy enough to blur the world into watercolor.

Tonight, the window glass is banded with rivulets, each drop catching the streetlight like a trembling star. Through them, she stands on the opposite balcony—pale coat, bare ankles, hair slicked to her cheeks. Not moving. Not waving. Simply watching.

I tell myself she’s a neighbor I’ve never met. A trick of light. A reflection that doesn’t belong to me.

But when I lift my hand, she does not mimic the motion. When thunder rolls, she tilts her head as though listening for a name she once knew. And when lightning cracks open the sky, for a breathless instant the rain clears—and she is suddenly close, her face pressed to the other side of my window, eyes wide with some urgent, impossible plea.

I stumble back.

The water runs down again, washing her features into streaks, then into suggestion, then into nothing at all.

By the time the storm ends, the glass holds only my own trembling reflection.

What do you see # 316- 24 November, 2025 – Keep it alive

4 responses to “Only my own reflection”

  1. SRIKANTH Avatar

    This is a breathtaking piece of writing. The atmosphere you’ve created is palpable and hauntingly beautiful. The opening line is pure poetry, setting the stage for a scene that feels both dreamlike and intensely real. The imagery of the rain blurring the world into a watercolor is not only a stunning visual but also the perfect metaphor for the entire encounter—something beautiful, transient, and impossible to hold in sharp focus.

    The slow, deliberate pacing builds a wonderful tension. The contrast between the narrator’s logical explanations (“a neighbor,” “a trick of light”) and the girl’s unsettling, non-mimetic actions is brilliantly executed. That moment of silent communication—or lack thereof—when the narrator lifts a hand is chilling in its implication.

    But the true masterstroke is the lightning strike. The sudden, breathless shift from a figure across the street to a face pressed against the glass is a visceral shock. The description of her “urgent, impossible plea” is incredibly powerful, leaving the reader, like the narrator, stunned and searching for meaning.

    The resolution is just as perfect as the setup. The gradual dissolution of the girl, from “streaks” to “suggestion” to “nothing,” is a beautiful and melancholic echo of the watercolor metaphor. It leaves behind a profound sense of mystery and the haunting echo of a connection that was never quite made, leaving the narrator—and us—alone with only our own trembling reflections. Exquisite work.

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    1. Carol anne Avatar

      Thanks for reading and commenting I appreciate xx

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  2. Violet Lentz Avatar

    I love your opening line- girl appears only when the rain is heavy enough to blur the world- I think I have been her several times.

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    1. Carol anne Avatar

      Yes, I have been her to Violet 😄

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