Bare branches reach up—
icy fingers touch the clouds,
moonlight hums through frost.
Bare branches shiver—
the moon pretends not to see
how cold the world is.
Written for sen-hai Saturday hosted by Susi!
24 responses to “Sen-hai Saturday #22”
What a beautiful and haunting pair of haiku. They work together so perfectly, creating a deepening sense of winter’s quiet solitude.
Your first poem paints a scene of stark, almost majestic beauty. The image of “icy fingers touch the clouds” is breathtaking, suggesting a world where the earth and sky are intimately connected by the cold. “Moonlight hums through frost” is a masterful line—it’s synesthetic, letting us not just see, but hear the silent, vibrational energy of the frozen night.
The second haiku then gives this scene a soul. The shift from “reach up” to “shiver” is powerful, introducing a note of vulnerability. The personification of the moon “pretend[ing] not to see” is simply brilliant. It implies a universe that is aware of the world’s suffering but remains detached, adding a layer of poignant loneliness that resonates deeply.
Together, they are a flawless duet of observation and emotion. Thank you for sharing this exquisite piece of poetry.
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